"the poetry is...abundant in passive verb tense and characterized by a dearth of pronouns."
Passive verbs are not automatically wrong...the passive voice serves an important purpose:
- When you wish to downplay the action [intentionally obtuse]
- When you wish to downplay the actor [again, obtuse by intention - thus the dearth of pronouns]
- When the actor is unknown [here too re: pronouns - generalized characters]
The active verb pronoun poem exercise:
I flick
She bowls
We snack on croutons
I lick
She rolls
We fuck on futons
I'm going to take a nap
He'll need to brush his teeth
We'll have to close the blinds
Or, the sun will creep beneath
She winks
I sneeze
We suffer from our roles
She stinks
I wheeze
We tore the pantyhose
[point well taken, I never thought about it before and will think about expansion]
